大家来看看我的英语简介有什么语法不对的,

大家来看看我的英语简介有什么语法不对的,
Dear teacher,
My name is Li Hang.I am fifteen years old.I am a lively boy.I come from Shang Qiu,He Nan province.
There are many places of interest in Shang Qiu,I was the most impressed is Days of Longhu.I have many hobbies.In primary school,I was the volleyball team captain.In middle school,I began to love playing basketball and billiards.When I feel unhappy,I am going to play sports.
Sometimes,I get a lot of pressure,I will go to the amusement park.
Music is my favourite.When I was free,I listen music,too.
I love many singer.For example,Backstreet Boys’《I want it that way》I like best
When I traved in Shang Hai,I think is a beautiful city.I went to The World Expo China Pavilion.It very special,and describes the rich Chinese culture.
Shanghai Oriental Pearl TV Tower ,Walking along the beach ,It is 468 m high.I can see it,eveywhere.
Shanghai gave me a deep impression .