Everyone has a lot of dreams .Some people want to be rich.Some people want to be famous.(Some people want to be rich while others want to be famous).I have a dream,too.When I was a small child(When I was a little kid),I had a dream that one day I would become a great pianist.I will(would) play the piano in the Musikvereinin Vienna to(去掉to,改成and) make the best music for the whole world.When l was three years old,my parents help me please a teacher(my parents paid a teacher for teaching me playing the piano).She is very beautiful and kind.She told me how to play the piano and how to make the music sound better.When l learned two months time(After learning about two months),I thought play the piano very difficult(改成I thought it is very difficult to play the piano).After learning my arms are very acid(去掉这句,改成 I felt my arms acid ),but I did not give up.Now,I’m twelve years old.I still want to be a pianist.I did a lot for the dream(加上to be a pianist )and I spend(改成spent) more than two hours playing the piano every day.It’s very hard,but I insist (加上on practicing )it(去掉) for nine years.No mill,no meal.Now I(I’m) in the Grade Examination of musical level of current year for nonprofessionals(这句话我没懂你要表达什么,所以没改) and have reached the 9th.grade in the playing of Piano(如果你想表达的是:我现在已经达到钢琴九级的话应该这么写and have reached the qualification for the grade nine in piano-playing).Piano is a kind of music(这句话你要表达什么呢?没懂,但你的表达方式肯定不对.).It helps me learn something of (of 改成about)music.Become a piano play is a hard job(Become a piano player is hard).I will be harder and harder to practice it(I would practice it harder and harder) .I believe I can do it.
你后面写的有些表达不清,不能确定你要表达什么.首先,很感谢您能帮我修改这篇作文。我仔细地看了您的回答,现在我还有几个问题想请教您(由于字数限制我将分多次追问,还望您能理解):
1、my parents paid a teacher for teaching me playing the piano我想问一下这里为什么用paid;
2、Become a piano player is hard.这里become是否需要换成becoming;抱歉啊,现在才看到你的追问。
1、paid是pay的过去式,你想表达的是你小时候父母给你请了一个老师,所以...
2、become改成becoming。(becoming a pianist是主语,is 动词,)
请各位英语达人帮我看一下这篇作文有没有错误,如果有的话请帮我改一下,谢谢!
请各位英语达人帮我看一下这篇作文有没有错误,如果有的话请帮我改一下,谢谢!
Everyone has a lot of dreams .Some people want to be rich. Some people want to be famous. I have a dream, too. When I was a small child, I had a dream that one day I would become a great pianist. I will play the piano in the Musikvereinin Vienna to make the best music for the whole world. When l was three years old, my parents help me please a teacher. She is very beautiful and kind. She told me how to play the piano and how to make the music sound better. When l learned two months time, I thought play the piano very difficult. After learning my arms are very acid, but I did not give up. Now, I’m twelve years old. I still want to be a pianist. I did a lot for the dream. I spend more than two hours playing the piano every day. It’s very hard, but I insist it for nine years. No mill, no meal. Now I in the Grade Examination of musical level of current year for nonprofessionals and have reached the 9th.grade in the playing of Piano. Piano is a kind of music. It helps me learn something of music. Become a piano play is a hard job. I will be harder and harder to practice it. I believe I can do it.
Everyone has a lot of dreams .Some people want to be rich. Some people want to be famous. I have a dream, too. When I was a small child, I had a dream that one day I would become a great pianist. I will play the piano in the Musikvereinin Vienna to make the best music for the whole world. When l was three years old, my parents help me please a teacher. She is very beautiful and kind. She told me how to play the piano and how to make the music sound better. When l learned two months time, I thought play the piano very difficult. After learning my arms are very acid, but I did not give up. Now, I’m twelve years old. I still want to be a pianist. I did a lot for the dream. I spend more than two hours playing the piano every day. It’s very hard, but I insist it for nine years. No mill, no meal. Now I in the Grade Examination of musical level of current year for nonprofessionals and have reached the 9th.grade in the playing of Piano. Piano is a kind of music. It helps me learn something of music. Become a piano play is a hard job. I will be harder and harder to practice it. I believe I can do it.
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