请帮我修改一下我论文的结尾段.

请帮我修改一下我论文的结尾段.
我的第一段是：Studying Abroad
More people choose to study abroad these days.Some people suggest that studying abroad should have a negative effect.They believe people will give up basic Chinese education if they study abroad.However,it has a positive effect on my life.In my opinion,completing an advanced education in a western society will not only broaden one’s horizons,but also greatly improve one’s English level.
第二段：The first important reason is that studying abroad can help people learn western advanced professional and practical knowledge.
三：Another factor is that studying abroad can improve our English.
四：Furthermore,studying abroad can broaden one’s horizons.
结尾段：From what has been discussed above,we may safely draw the conclusion that studying abroad has a positive effect on people.It can help people learn western advanced and practical technique,improve one’s English level,and broaden one’s horizons.
老师说结尾段需要最少5句话，应该怎样改啊？