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Nowadays,
an increasing number of coupleschoose to break up for some reasons,
leaving a single-parent family to theirchildren.While everyone has a
right to pursuit his/her own happiness,I feelsuch a thing is extremely
irresponsible for children.
First,although it is true
that decidingwhether or not have babies can solely be responsible for
mothers,it is clearthat both of mothers and fathers have a duty to
bring their children uptogether once they had decided to give birth to
babies.
Moreover,a father as well as a motherplays a
crucial role in children growing.Fathers are always heroes of boys
aswell as mothers are always best friends of girls.Surely,every member
of afamily is necessary to each other and is irreplaceable for a
complete unit.
On the other hand,a single-parent
familygenerally has kinds of problem for bringing the children up.It
most oftenbegun with a financial issue,then led to a communication
problem that thefathers or mothers were occupied by quantity of jobs and
thus they have no muchtime to take care of their babies.Obviously,
young minds is impressionable andsometimes need structure,if their
parent cannot take a plenty of time to communicatewith them,they might
be out of control in their growing.
In conclusion,in
order for the children toprovide a best growing environment,the
cooperation would be needed for both ofparents.Bringing the children up
is the most important task of fathers as wellas mothers,and that is
not only a social duty,but a continual source ofhappiness for perfect
families.
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