Adavantages of Taking a Part-time Job 帮我看看里面有那些语法错误,

Adavantages of Taking a Part-time Job 帮我看看里面有那些语法错误,
As we all known ,part-time job is more and more popular in college ,which prove obviously that part-time job can bring college students some advantages .there are 3 advantages as follows.
firstly,part-time job will provide you a chance to earn money .you can use this sum of money what you earn to buy something what you earn to buy something what you like.at the same time ,you will fell a special happiness when you spend this sum of money.
secondly ,part-time job will train you the ability of indepence,which can reduce your reliable and laziness.
thirdly ,part-time job can also give you some useful experience to approch society,which is helpful for you to widen your horizon and improve your knowledge.